In this conclusion I am going to review key points; the key point for this paper is that no on likes a Betty. This conclusion has its draw as a unifier that draws together all the paper into a finishing statement that should leave the reader reflection on what they just read.
That night after closing the manager stepped back for a moment and surveyed the room, there were seven points in the room that drew his focus. Betty White's stool, Betty Snotty's traditional place by the window, Betty Boobs still sweat covered mat, Betty Food's discarded food rappers and bags, the clock that dictated Betty Want's tantrums, the marks on the wall where Betty Rage's misplaced anger had been taken out, and the former "horde" of dumbbells that was Betty More's prized possessions. He sighed, closed his eyes, and imagined how much easier his life would be if there were no Betties.
In this conclusion I am attempting to supply how the reader can use the information in the paper. This is slightly humorous and probably needs a lot of work before it can be published in the paper but I believe it could be a very good conclusion.
Now in this world of bench press benches and dumbbells there are the Betties and the people who are not named Betties. Although it is not as obvious in the real world there are also Betties and non-Betties, and you can use the information provided in this essay to navigate the real world as well as the fictional ones. If you see a Betty roll your eyes and look away like the many bystanders at the WCWC, because if you confront them it will only lead to becoming a Betty yourself. If you are not sure that you are a Betty or not then you probably are and the writer of this paper advises you to step back from the world for a minute and contemplate your actions, because no one likes a Betty.
Hi Samantha,
ReplyDeleteConsider adding your original conclusion to the beginning of this and to introduce it a bit more. Analyze the original and then talk more about each revised draft.
What do you like about each one including the original? What needs work?
Which one is best in the end? What do you think about what your peers said? In the end, what did you learn about writing conclusions? This might be a nice way to end this post and then to include that learning in your "Letter to the Reader" later.
Ms. Basko